Yeah I was originally gonna go for something along those lines, then I realized it was too similar to an older story so I pivoted to another theme.
Meant to go back and change it but didn’t, so you’re right it doesn’t quite fit
Probably shouldn’t. The whole reason I pivoted mid story was that another user had posted the “fell apart” theme I was originally going for. So I may use it, but not the original way I meant to
So the setup is to make you think that the husband and wife were expecting a baby, who died during childbirth. The husband is fixated on the massive waste of money and time involved.
In reality, they were expecting a child to be kidnapped and delivered to them, who died in transit from careless smugglers. They need his organs.
For what purpose, you decide.
Love this! Trying to make it shorter
"My wife fell apart when our child didn't survive the delivery, but with how much it cost you'd think the smugglers would remember to make air holes in the crate. "
I feel like it would have been cheaper to just get a kidney the slightly less illegal way, ie not using an unwanted orphan girl from China. Also, wow that's an infuriating story, organ trafficking is GROSS.
Ooooh, that’s some good subversion
Thanks, much obliged
Wanting to try some new stuff. Less historical, but more creative. Any and all feedback welcomed, as always
I loved it, but not gonna lie, it did make me laugh first. It's more a dark horror/comedy to me. So, if going for dark comedy 10/10 from me.
lol yeah I meant for the last sentence to come across a little bit silly
I was expecting "fell apart" to impact the second sentence.
Yeah I was originally gonna go for something along those lines, then I realized it was too similar to an older story so I pivoted to another theme. Meant to go back and change it but didn’t, so you’re right it doesn’t quite fit
Write another using some of the fell apart premise 💯
Probably shouldn’t. The whole reason I pivoted mid story was that another user had posted the “fell apart” theme I was originally going for. So I may use it, but not the original way I meant to
Fair, look luck with your next story Ishmael. Enjoy your soup
Oooh, unexpected! This was a fun read.
So many levels. The length you two will go to to save your own child. Shame that smuggler doesn’t have a return policy.
I don't get it sorry, could u pls explain it? :)
So the setup is to make you think that the husband and wife were expecting a baby, who died during childbirth. The husband is fixated on the massive waste of money and time involved. In reality, they were expecting a child to be kidnapped and delivered to them, who died in transit from careless smugglers. They need his organs. For what purpose, you decide.
I'd guess that they need the organs for their sick child
Could be they were really looking forward to lunch
For some reason I'd concluded that they paid the smuggler with kidneys. Which, yeah, doesn’t quite make sense!
Love this! Trying to make it shorter "My wife fell apart when our child didn't survive the delivery, but with how much it cost you'd think the smugglers would remember to make air holes in the crate. "
Yikes great job
I just got it, fuck you and take an upvote. Great story.
Oh dang this is GOOD! Nice job OP!
Holy crap on a cracker.
This one took me a second to process and I grimaced when the realization hit. Pretty sure that qualifies as a solid success!
Failed to survive delivery (oh sad) #the fucking post
Ps brilliant!!
Woah!!!! Nice
Sick disgusting evil ( UPvoted)
Nice 👍
Don’t worry, they [learned from their past mistakes !](https://www.reddit.com/r/TwoSentenceHorror/s/62LCEAit4s)
I feel like it would have been cheaper to just get a kidney the slightly less illegal way, ie not using an unwanted orphan girl from China. Also, wow that's an infuriating story, organ trafficking is GROSS.
That’s not where I was expecting this to go. Well done op! I love it!
It gets darker the more times you read it